Wednesday, April 10, 2013

Jilted in July






Jim's jalopy stalled outside the joint,
Jukebox playing their favorite tune.
Juleps ordered at the bar,
Jumpy as he waited for his June.

Jitterbug contest just announced,
Jessie gestured for Jim to take her hand.
Jovial as he politely declined,
Jealous he refused to be her man.

Jaws dropped as men eyed the sultry stranger,
June ran into his outstretched arms.
Jim felt like time stood still,
Joyful as he drank in all her charms.

Jilted Jessie aimed to pull the trigger,
Jigsaw pieces scattered in the hall.
Janitor swept up what was remaining,
Jury's still out on the final call.

Jaywalking en route to the courthouse,
June awaits the trial's outcome.
Judge tenses as June is handcuffed,
Justice served for buying Jessie's gun.
 
 

30 comments:

  1. What an excellent poem, wonderful to read.

    Yvonne.

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  2. As always, so clever . . . and so many Js, and a twist at the end too :)

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  3. Thank you so much Yvonne!

    Rhonda - I had trouble choosing one "J, " so I may have overcompensated! Thanks Rhonda!

    Julie

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  4. Hi Julie ... missing the Junkets - the other meaning! Very clever with your Js ... great poem too ... cheers Hilary

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  5. This is amazing!! A true 'J' post :)

    Kriti

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  6. I was not expecting it to end like this. However, if Mrs Lanza lived she probably would be tried as well.

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  7. I really enjoyed how you put this all together, poetic story I say and I loved how you used the Js in each sentence, with the twist too. Brilliant.

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  8. I'm so impressed with this. And of course the ending was perfect, always love your twists. :D

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  9. Creative and full of twists and turns. Love the ending, very unexpected!

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  10. Ornery - Thanks and the same to you!

    Hilary - Thanks for your joyful comment!

    Thank you Kriti!

    Munir - This is just a light make believe poem about "J" words. It has nothing to do with the horrific Sandy Hook Elementary School massacre.

    Good one Delores!

    Thanks Lynn!

    RPD - I had fun putting this all together. Thank you Rum Punch Drunk!

    Julie - I really enjoy writing surprise endings. Thanks Julie!

    Jen - I wasn't sure where this was heading myself. Thanks Jen!

    Thanks for your jubilant comment Rosalind!

    Julie


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  11. WOW - that an outcome. Very nice poetry. That one left a big impact!

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  12. Great J day post. I love the ending :)


    http://intoabarrel.blogspot.com/

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  13. You always say the nicest things Mary!

    Thank you Kathy!

    Thanks Mary K!

    Alex - It's always fun to add a little twist. Thanks Alex!

    Julie

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  14. Wonderful! Loved this.
    Donna

    http://www.TheWaywardGifted.blogspot.com

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  15. Lynn - You always crack me up!

    Thanks Carol!

    I really appreciate it Donna!

    Julie

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  16. Just a jaw dropping juicy tale.

    http://joycelansky.blogspot.com

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  17. Thank you Jeff!

    The J's are jumping off the page. Thanks Joyce!

    Julie

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  18. Jumping Jehosophat! What a twist!
    Great J-post!

    Writer In Transit

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  19. Wow, now that took some doing! Crazy twist at the end, had me stumped, had to go back and read it again!

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  20. Adorable. Where did you find all those j's? WOW!

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