Table for two,
They sat and stared.
Toasted to time gone by,
Too many wounds to repair,
Too hopeless to even try.
There there don't you cry,
Their hands nearly touched.
Then they couldn't stay apart,
Today not so much.
There's trouble in twos,
Their folks would say.
Two kids, two cars,
Too many bills to pay.
Two tables down,
They were held in a trance.
The waiter never took their order.
Too focused on romance.
The band played until dawn,
Two by two left feet in disarray.
Too bad it finally hit them,
The married brother and sister were gay.
Loved the twist at the end...very cleverly written.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
Too twisted (not really, but I did love the twist and tried to stick with the Ts. See why I don't do poetry :)
ReplyDeleteOops! There's always something. Darn the luck. You're great for surprise endings, Julie.
ReplyDeletexoRobyn
The unexpected surprises of marriage.
ReplyDeleteAnother great surprise ending. Also just loved the poem in general, very fun to read.
ReplyDeleteSurprised again!
ReplyDeleteI was not expecting this end. Your imagination is very acute to have attached a nice ( but sad ending) to a beautiful poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you Yvonne!
ReplyDeleteRhonda - You're right it is twisted!
Robyn - Just a slight problem! Thanks Robyn!
Good one Al!
Julie - I had fun writing it. Thanks Julie!
Lee - Glad I could surprise you!
Thanks so much Munir!
Julie
Whoa! Did not see that ending coming.
ReplyDeleteGreat Twist!!
ReplyDeleteDitto on what Alex said!
ReplyDeleteSuch sadness...and then the twist at the end. Sigh.
ReplyDeleteAlex - It needed a little levity!
ReplyDeleteThank you A Daft Scots Lass!
Ruth - I've always liked surprise endings.
Susan - Was it a bit too much?!
Julie
Love the twists and turns.
ReplyDeleteWhoa! You are the master of surprise endings! (Or is it mistress...)
ReplyDeleteWriter In Transit
Thanks Carol!
ReplyDeleteMichelle - And you are the master/mistress of Five Sentence Fiction! Either one is nice. Thanks Michelle!
Julie
Liked the feel of the whole thing and that was a great twist.
ReplyDeleteWay to go, Julie! You definitely caught me by surprise.
ReplyDeleteThank you Nick!
ReplyDeleteSusan - You are also a pro at twists and surprise endings! Thanks Susan!
Julie
That last line was a bit...jaw-dropping. hahah
ReplyDeleteTrisha - I just tried to lighten things up a little.
DeleteJulie
Great poem. I'm glad I dropped by. From another empty nester with a son who has a Post grad in English law, who is now training to be a solicitor.
ReplyDeleteHi Julie .. I definitely didn't see that turn of events .. cheers Hilary
ReplyDeleteBanned complain !! Complaining only causes life and mind become more severe. Enjoy the rhythm of the problems faced. No matter ga life, not a problem not learn, so enjoy it :)
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