Lost in lust,
Locked in a trance.
Lingering effects,
Long distance romance.
Last one to call,
Lights out and then.
Lying miles apart,
Listening to faint whispers again.
Letter arrives the next day,
Listing the others he's misled.
Laughing, "They must be mistaken,
Lackeys are nuts in the head."
Loneliness looms in,
Longing to see her beau.
Life was so cruel,
Love interest was a gigolo.
Great post Julie, loved the verse.
ReplyDeleteYvonne.
She's better off without him methinks.
ReplyDeleteLong distance and a giggolo . . . not a good combination. Love the poem.
ReplyDeleteLove hurts until the next guy comes along.
ReplyDeleteOh heartbreak, you visit us all.
ReplyDeleteoh dear, was not expecting this lousy twist. Good poem
ReplyDeleteThe opening verses drew me in. Excellent poem!
ReplyDeleteHi, Julie,
ReplyDeleteWell done prose! You've written a whole story in just a few stanzas.... I really enjoyed it!
Hope all is well!
Liked the Love story.
ReplyDeleteLost in Lust.
ReplyDeleteA sad lonely man.
Mrs. Penwasser? Not home.
I'll give me a hand.
Yvonne - Thanks for the kind words, Yvonne!
ReplyDeleteDelores - Methinks you're right!
Rhonda - He had two strikes against him. Thanks Rhonda!
Arleen - "Someday he'll come along, the man I love, and he'll be big and strong..." I think Etta James said it best.
Debra - I couldn't agree more!
Joanne- This means a lot coming from one of my favorite poets! Thanks Joanne!
Chrys - Thank you so much, Chrys!
Michael - Hope you're doing well too! At least it's finally warming up a bit here. Thanks Michael!
Jo - I thought I'd try something a little different. Thanks Jo!
Al - Now that's a poem! Thanks for lightening up the mood! Go wash your hand in scalding water, Al!
Julie
I'll sit on it so it goes numb. Then, I can....oh, I've said too much already.
DeleteYou have a way with words. Lots of L's in our poem. Just read on someone's blog we're at the halfway point! Yea us.
ReplyDeleteSandy at Bridge and Beyond
Your poetry is so intelligent! I am intrigued by your collection Old Broads Waxing Poetic and you are a woman after my own heart by donating the proceeds.
ReplyDeleteBrandy from Brandy's Bustlings
Oh no. That's not how it should end, but it makes for lovely poetry.
ReplyDeleteFunny ending.
ReplyDeleteSandy - Glad we're at the halfway point! Thanks Sandy!
ReplyDeleteBrandy - I can't tell you how much I appreciate your kind words! Old Broads was a team effort, and a labor of love. We're thrilled to donate the proceeds to CARE! Thanks for making my day, Brandy!
Lee - It needed a pinch of sour mixed in with the sweet. Thanks Lee!
Alex - Thanks for always taking the time to stop by. Glad you liked the ending. Thanks Alex!
Julie
I really like your poems! They are very well-written and interesting :)
ReplyDeleteThis must be to all the women who get taken in by the internet or mail where these jerks ask for money and then boom-they are gone. Great poem-well done
ReplyDeleteWhat a loser!
ReplyDeleteThis poem makes me feel so nostalgic. It could have been written by dear Madam Z, who stopped blogging several years ago. I remember her writing something with a very similar meter, but I couldn't find it in her blog. I wish I could show her your poem.
ReplyDeletehttp://z-to-u.blogspot.co.uk/
What a poem. I started off feeling nostalgic and hopefully romantic. Then I was envisioning the difficulties of a long distance relationship. Then you zapped with with your twist ending. He is a cad, a loser, a cheat. You have an extraordinary way with words. They flow so well from each stanza to the next. Loved the L poem.
ReplyDeleteGEM JULIE ~
ReplyDeleteSaw the blog bit title appear in my Dashboard and hurried over, thinking your blog had gone "Adult Content".
Nuts! No pictures. Nuttin' but romance gone bad. (Actually, I'm OK with bad romance but... I'd prefer it illustrated. No imagination here, ya see?)
~ D-FensDogG
'Loyal American Underground'
Elizabeth - Thank you so much, Elizabeth!
ReplyDeleteBirgit - It's a combination of both, and a parody on sappy love poems. Thanks Birgit!
Dixie - I couldn't agree with you more!
Gorilla - I'm not familiar with Madam Z, but I would love to read her poem. Let me know if you find it. Thanks for offering to share this with her, Gorilla!
Melissa - I really appreciate your kind words, Melissa! Thank you for brightening my day!
Stephen - I'm sorry to disappoint you. Since you mentioned "Bad Romance," you can just picture Lady Gaga, or is Jessica Rabbit more your type?
Julie
very well done!
ReplyDeleteOh... Jessica Rabbit, of course!
ReplyDeleteYou know, she's not bad. She's just drawn that way.
~ D-FensDogG
Kathy - Thank you Kathy!
DeleteStephen - "You know she's not bad. She's just drawn that way!" Hahaha! Another great comeback, Stephen! Oh, and thanks for always coming back!
Julie
Ouch. So it goes - all too often. This one was like a rollercoaster with a long drop at the end. Great L, Julie.
ReplyDeleteRobyn - Great analogy, Robyn! I suppose this is how it would feel to receive this kind of news from someone that you loved and trusted. This feeling reminds me of the old skit on the Carol Burnett Show, "As The Stomach turns!" Thanks Robyn!
DeleteJulie
Hi Julie - it is a brilliant poem and one so many of us would love .. and the twisting turn at the end ... rolls off so contentedly ... but not for her .. MEN?! Such a great read and lovely comments .. cheers Hilary
ReplyDeleteGreat poem. The heart wants what it wants.
ReplyDeleteonce again you win the prize! very fun!
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