Thursday, June 30, 2011

Friction At The Fireworks

                                                                                                 Julie Kemp Pick

Wishing on a star,
Gazing into each other's eyes.
Feeling the lakeside breeze,
Under the evening skies.

Cuddling close on a picnic blanket,
Delicious delicacies prepared by he.
Tucked away in a remote corner,
Oblivious to the surrounding activity.

Patriotic music playing,
Confessing all their future plans.
Reminiscing about childhood pasts,
Trying not to slip out of entwined clammy hands.

Music grows louder as the sky turns foreboding,
Lights start to flicker as fireworks are exploding.
Thunder and lightening take over the sky,
He's still optimistic while he finishes his pie.

He wants to wait it out as their feast floats away,
She's getting drenched while he's itching to stay.
Her mascara is running; her hair's in a frizz,
For fireworks he's still gunning, too stubborn to give.

She almost falls as she races in her swamp filled flats,
Just in time to catch a ride home with umbrella clad brats.
He calls to apologize hoping to reschedule for another fireworks show,
She politely declines while suggesting another place he should go.


  1. Gee, I wonder where that was? Someplace warm I assume?

  2. I loved this! Though usually I'm rooting for the couple to end up together, I love how you rained on their moods.

  3. A fun read, cute ending ... Their fireworks date just fizzled :(

  4. @mjb/Delores - Are you a dynamic duo or just one super woman?! Sizzling all year long!

    @Beverly - I decided to drown out the sentiment! Thanks Beverly!

    @Joanne - At least no one lost their eyebrows. I read that was one of the most common 4th of July accidents. Thanks Joanne!

    Wishing everyone a Happy 4th of July! Julie

  5. Hi Julie .. loved the rainstorm .. I'd have gone too .. there's so much fun one can have freezing to death in a thunderstorm .. and the lightening would drown out the fun of the fireworks!

    Lovely story line .. thanks .. I hope it doesn't rain on your parade this weekend .. happy 4th July .. Hilary

  6. Loved the read, full of imaginary and the ending was excellent.

    Have a lovely day.

  7. @Hilary - Yes thunderstorms are always a joyous event! Hope you have a wonderful weekend too!

    @Yvonne - Thanks so much Yvonne! Hope you also have a nice weekend!

  8. Fun post, Julie! I love thunderstorms, as long as I'm on the inside looking out. It's supposed to be something like 98 degrees the night of our local fireworks this weekend. Hmmm, think I'd prefer the thunderstorm ... Have a great fourth.

  9. I am so enjoying your poetry. This one was really fun. Hope it isn't anyone you know :)

  10. @Susan - Try to stay cool and have a Happy 4th!

    @Rhonda - You are too funny! The truth is my husband does love fireworks and pie, and my hair does frizz up in the humidity, but the rest is pure fiction! Julie

  11. NIce~Ha! How quickly things can change~Thank g-d you love each other~ :))) Great poem~Happy 4th~

  12. That was one hot piece of poetry--it sizzled.

    Tossing It Out

  13. @Lou - Thanks Laura, but the poem is not based on a true story. The Friction is Fiction! Happy 4th!

    @Lee - Thanks, it must have been really sizzling in Las Vegas! Hope you're having a great 4th of July weekend! Julie

  14. Haha! Love the ending - so much for the fireworks!

    Happy fourth of July.

  15. Thanks Talli! Have a great blogcation and I'll be thinking of you while I read THE HATING GAME! Julie

  16. I love this, Julie, especially the last line. I was wrapped up in the romance until her hair got frizzed out and things went downhill from there. I'm still laughing at the ending.
    Be well!

  17. Thanks Robyn! I hope you had a wonderful visit with your adorable nephew! Julie

  18. What a neat poem! Saw your comment on Alex's blog and thought I would pop over. Glad I did!

    That last line was a killer. Still chuckling over it. Thanks for sharing!

    Consider me a new follower.


  19. @Bryce - Thanks for the kind words and I'm thrilled to have you as a follower! I wonder if something is wrong with my button as I don't see you up there. I'm following you as well and look forward to more of your amazing blog! Julie

  20. Hi again, Julie. Thanks! I look forward to catching up with you in bloggyland when I return.
    Be well.

  21. You always have such great endings to your poems, Julie! This cracked me up. I would have told the guy the same thing! :D

    Hope you had a wonderful 4th!

  22. @Robyn - Happy camping!

    @Julie - Thank you! I wish that I would've told off some of my dates!

  23. I like the twist at the end of this one. Good story telling.